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Retrospect - revised - by ~Ninjastar13:iconNinjastar13:



There are things I took for granted,
Removed, Revealed my view was slanted.
Now I live my life enchanted.
I was once rooted, Now I'm planted

Can you imagine of you knew
How your life and what you do
Dissolved, Resolved and what have you
And left you something wholly new?

Would you bear it or berate it?
I know you'll wish you were sedated
But once your panic has abated
You'll find you've been left elated

Any time you miss what passed,
Remember nothing's meant to last.
And even though it's moving fast,
Life is lived and not amassed.

But if you feel that you've been cheated
And your life has been depleted
Remain, regain whats been deleted
And holy throne will be unseated

Mountains, then, will crumble slightly,
And you'll suffer with it nightly.
But all the rest will feel it lightly,
And you will join the fallen mighty.

In the end you'll know for certain
what lies there behind the curtain.
Places that you cant be hurt in,
Its not a blessing but a burden.
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Author's Comments

I started thinking in rhyme the other day and this was merely a thought of mine. Lemme hear ya!
Oh, its a work in progress i hope to add to it regularly.
:)
EDIT - Added some new stanza's.

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:iconiammickey:
In the first line of second stanza, I think you mean "if", not "of."

Very concise and poignant.
:iconninjastar13:
I did meant that.
Danke.
:)

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:iconbloknayrb:
But once your panic has elated
You'll find you've been left elated
?
Is that intentional? Otherwise awesome.

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There's a reason that little guy looks so oblivious.
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:iconninjastar13:
Oh crap, not intentional fixed it now though.
Thanks, good-eyes.
:)

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:iconbloknayrb:
Nice ;)

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There's a reason that little guy looks so oblivious.
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:iconpanthergirl:
Nice rhymes! It's got a rhythm to it. I want to say it's iambic pentameter, but I could be wrong.

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:iconninjastar13:
Thank you muchly,
It is not Iambic pentameter. Munes only got four beats not five.
:)

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:iconpanthergirl:
I noticed that, but I wasn't sure of the technical term for that. (If there is one.)

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