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Take your place or lead the herd,
Doing both is quite absurd.
Disregard what feelings stirred.
Now's the time;when lines are blurred.

If you miss it, you must stow
That central place with outward flow.
It will sigh and cease to grow
As slow sadness begins to show.

Your name will adorn the purse accurséd.
Your cries for mercy's worst, reverséd.
At best, you won't get reimburséd
At worst, your death will be rehearséd.

As the days relieve the nights,
Realize the steady ironic might,
That time is a slice of traveling light.
And though it stings you'll be all right.

And when that central place is rested
And you feel that life's been bested.
Cry, because you've yet been tested,
Regardless of the end requested.

So take your place twixt wolf and flock.
And find the life there quite a shock.
Nary a glance, your central clock,
Nary a thought, that stale tick-tock.
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Its been while. But please tell me your opinions good bad or otherwise.
This is a sister/brother poem with Retrospect:
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Thanks in advance!
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:icongrifmore:
I really like the choice of words and the setup / composition of the poem. I really loved:

"As the days relieve the nights,
Realize the steady ironic might,
That time is a slice of traveling light.
And though it stings you'll be all right."

Pretty decent poem all in all, I'd say ^^

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Writers and politicians are natural rivals. Both groups try to make the world in their own images; they fight for the same territory.

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Roses are red, violets are... blueniverse...
I really like the center of the universe?
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Thank you kindly, I am filled with satisfaction and content that someone has enjoyed my work.
Much Appreciation.
:)

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"that stale tick-tock"...what a wonderful way to finish it. Lovely. :)

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too much ryming for me, but pretty good

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:iconthelittlestrawberry:
That last line... just... a perfect ending.
Lots of rhyming, but I have a tendency to do the same thing [I'm trying to break that habit ><] :)

Overall, it's a wonderful poem.

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:iconninjastar13:
Why try and break it? is it a bad thing?

Thanks very much.
:)

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Peace :peace:
:iconthelittlestrawberry:
No, it's just I want to try and see if I can write something without such a fixed rhyme pattern XD

And you're welcome~

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Good luck. I know you can do it.
:)

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---Surrealism without purpose is like fish...
Peace :peace:
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You have faith in me even though you don't know what I can do. :D
That makes me feel all warm and fuzzy.

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